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Old 09-08-2010, 02:09 PM   #1
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So, seeing as how I don't post a lot on SC-II, this will seem extra-spammy to some of you. For those of you who remember me from the days of SC-prime, though, I thought I'd throw this out there.

In order to drum up some interest in the novels I've written (and am just now beginning to try to sell), I've started a serialized prequel, to be published in blog form. The setting is early-Cyberpunk, as the technology typical to the milieu is just being introduced.

Dark Mercury: Book Zero

It won't be as polished as my actual novels, but hopefully it will still be something some of you might enjoy.

And I figure if I can't take the snark level of SCers, I shouldn't even be trying to get published.
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I wish you the best of luck in getting published!

I'll come back and read as soon as I'm feeling a bit better.
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  1. This seems extra-spammy to me.
  2. The color choices on the blog are predictable and hard on my eyes.
  3. Gabe might be more harsh on this than I am being, though I could be wrong.
  4. Best of luck, Augie, I'll start reading tonight!
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Fantastic!

Very engaging, and I want moar.
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  1. The color choices on the blog are predictable and hard on my eyes.
Yeah, I know...my knowledge of HTML would fit in a thimble and still leave room for a fingertip, so it's just a default theme. I was worried about readability when I saw the post...I might try something a bit more legible if I can figure out how.

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Fantastic!

Very engaging, and I want moar.
Thanks. There's actually two whole novels after this. If they don't sell by the time I finish this story, I'm going to self publish the Kindle/iBooks route, most likely.
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Yeah, I know...my knowledge of HTML would fit in a thimble and still leave room for a fingertip, so it's just a default theme. I was worried about readability when I saw the post...I might try something a bit more legible if I can figure out how.
zOMGBBQ! Dude, only #4 was a serious answer! The blog is fine.
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zOMGBBQ! Dude, only #4 was a serious answer! The blog is fine.

In all fairness, I think it's a safe bet to say #3 was true as well
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Fun read!

I actually read them backwards XD But it still made sense. I actually like to be thrown in the middle of a story and be left with questions that are later answered.
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lol, kita.. I did the same thing. (Still made sense for me, too.) :P

Not a bad story! I'm intrigued and will try to keep up with Book Zero for now. You've got me hooked a bit here

Hope to see you published soon!
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Chapter 2 of my blog-novel is online now at http://darkmercury.wordpress.com/ . Go have a look-see! I've cleaned up the flow of the site too, so only the first paragraph of each chapter appears without a click-through. Much easier to follow now.

Oh, and I'll keep coming back here and waving my little ego-flag every time I update, unless I'm told it's inappropriate.
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Good deal Augie and good to see you here. I'll do some reading on my next ten hour park.
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Good deal Augie and good to see you here. I'll do some reading on my next ten hour park.
Thanks, Mama Leck. Eventually, I'm going to grovel to everyone I know to spread the link around, but I'm waiting until I'm sure I'm in the writing mode.

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Just finished reading Chapter 2. Looks like you have me hooked.

Damn you. :P
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And, here's your weekly spam to let you know that, yes, Chapter 3 is now posted.

Eventually, once the site has legs, I can stop posting this. Right now, it's all about self-promotion.

Out of curiosity, *if* I asked...would anyone be willing to spread the link around a little bit and help a struggling writer out?

I wonder if anyone is subscribed to/is ignoring this thread.
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I'll have to take some time to check this out, mang! Cool stuff.

And, try to show some 'ePub format' love when you publish, too. Works better for those of us that are of the 'B&N nook' kind.
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I'll have to take some time to check this out, mang! Cool stuff.

And, try to show some 'ePub format' love when you publish, too. Works better for those of us that are of the 'B&N nook' kind.
Looking into it now. My general HTML-relates skills are close to nil, but if I can figure out how, I will.
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Looking into it now. My general HTML-relates skills are close to nil, but if I can figure out how, I will.
Oh, I should have been more specific. When you mentioned publishing for Kindle/iPad. They can all use different format. The nook uses ePub and PDF.
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Oh, I should have been more specific. When you mentioned publishing for Kindle/iPad. They can all use different format. The nook uses ePub and PDF.
So if I put it up there in PDF format, you'd be able to view it from the little whoosiewhatsit?

I could do that. I was actually thinking of having a PDF of "The Story Thus Far" available in the sticky-post.

I'm also thinking about paying a friend to be a web-guru, give me a quick set-up on a better layout, and teach me how to do some seemingly simplistic stuff.

Of course, I would be far more motivated once I got above the 100 page-views mark. I'm addicted to watching the little "Blog Stats" line dwindle a little bit with each update. :-/
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More please.
I've got plenty more of Book Zero (plus two entire novels that take place about two to three years after this). I'm trying to stick to the post-per-week rate. To be honest, I finished Chapter 4 today, and I'm getting well into Chapter 5.

I think if I ever have two full chapters done at once, I'll post them both at the same time (like I did for the Prologue and Chapter 1).

I actually have some questions for people who have read it, but I'm going to wait until the next chapter, when the story is going a bit more fluidly.

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So if I put it up there in PDF format, you'd be able to view it from the little whoosiewhatsit?

I could do that. I was actually thinking of having a PDF of "The Story Thus Far" available in the sticky-post.

I'm also thinking about paying a friend to be a web-guru, give me a quick set-up on a better layout, and teach me how to do some seemingly simplistic stuff.

Of course, I would be far more motivated once I got above the 100 page-views mark. I'm addicted to watching the little "Blog Stats" line dwindle a little bit with each update. :-/
A great thing about Wordpress (at least if you host it yourself, not sure about their free version on their site) is that you can just find a theme you like; you download the .zip file for it; then upload that .zip file into the 'Themes' area of your Wordpress blog and then you can activate.

Done.

At least that is how it works for the version I use for two blogs that I host on my own domain using Wordpress.
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I've got plenty more of Book Zero (plus two entire novels that take place about two to three years after this). I'm trying to stick to the post-per-week rate. To be honest, I finished Chapter 4 today, and I'm getting well into Chapter 5.

I think if I ever have three full chapters done at once, I'll post them both at the same time (like I did for the Prologue and Chapter 1).

I actually have some questions for people who have read it, but I'm going to wait until the next chapter, when the story is going a bit more fluidly.

/fixed

I just read what you'd posted up to now and would have read more happily.

I have a week off that should be filled with study and I need mah coffee breaks!

So hurry it up Augie!
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Hmmm where did my post go? It disappeared... oh well.

1. Edit the Comments section and allow us to post comments w/out leaving an email addy!

2. I wanted more time in the rehab center... what did they do to him? Is he all tricked out Ninja-style, like River in Firefly? Does he have nano-thingies in his blood now? What?

3. When we first learned about the implants, they were supposed to go in his brain; now they're in his wrist... what gives?

4. I appreciate that you're trying to move ahead in the timeline, but sometimes I feel like I'm reading in fast-forward... maybe you could spend a little more "time" in each episode of his life... flesh them out a little?

5. All in all, good so far! I'm looking forward to the next installment.
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I just read what you'd posted up to now and would have read more happily.

I have a week off that should be filled with study and I need mah coffee breaks!

So hurry it up Augie!
Well, to clarify, I meant three UNREAD chapters that I could post all at once.

But I'm hurrying, I'm hurrying.
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Of course, I would be far more motivated once I got above the 100 page-views mark. I'm addicted to watching the little "Blog Stats" line dwindle a little bit with each update. :-/
This offer got eaten in the Great Crash of September '10, but I'll take my kid's laptop around town and read from different wi-fi spots around if that'll help the page-views
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Fixed...I think...let me know if it didn't work.

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Yeah, I thought about that, but I wanted to leave it a bit more open to discovery. That being said, I think you're TOTALLY right on this. I reveal a bit more later, but maybe I'll write out an add-in to that chapter and post it somewhere.

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This could be clearer on my part. What I meant was that it's an implant in the brain, cable down the arm, interface plugs in the wrist. I think I deleted that part. You know, the chapter about the rehab center would be a great place for that.

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I think I usually do that with the bulk of my writing (I actually often feel like I'm moving too slowly), but I think that writing serially has made me feel like I have to have a BIG point every chapter...which I don't.

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Thank you, thank you, THANK YOU for the comments and suggestions, I really appreciate it!
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Yeah, I thought about that, but I wanted to leave it a bit more open to discovery. That being said, I think you're TOTALLY right on this. I reveal a bit more later, but maybe I'll write out an add-in to that chapter and post it somewhere.
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Funny....I kinda liked the vagueness (and that's pretty much what I had pictured).
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Funny....I kinda liked the vagueness (and that's pretty much what I had pictured).
Well, my thought was that I wanted to leave it as "what the hell happened in there, anyway?" and then drop tidbits of it lately.

And I'd hazard a guess (not knowing anything about everyone's reading habits) that perhaps there's a correlation between recognizing that and having read much of the genre.

I could be totally off-base, though.
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I bet we haven't heard the last of Megan.

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Are you going to incorporate the Mango Dance into the story?
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I'm ready to meet the future! Of this story!!

Great read, again. You've had some interesting developments so far, I'm looking forward to reading what happens next... should be an interesting chapter.

As for the pace of the story, I figured a lot was left out so that it could be referred to later and revealed that way. Also, I got the idea that the implants were what you described above.

One way to mitigate "I hafta have BIG" and including the extra info (if you wanted to and if it makes sense to) is to simply have longer chapters.
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In my never-ending quest for self-promotion, I wanted to announce that chapter 4 has been posted for your reading pleasure.

I'm considering going to a Tuesday/Friday release schedule, since my writing seems to be going pretty smoothly.

I am also going to probably this in the morning, just because I'm a whore.
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In my never-ending quest for self-promotion, I wanted to announce that chapter 4 has been posted for your reading pleasure.

I'm considering going to a Tuesday/Friday release schedule, since my writing seems to be going pretty smoothly.

I am also going to probably this in the morning, just because I'm a whore.


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Every time you post a chapter, can you relink in that post? It's a PITA to go scrolling round to look for the URL... sorry. I'm just lazy.
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Every time you post a chapter, can you relink in that post? It's a PITA to go scrolling round to look for the URL... sorry. I'm just lazy.
Ooh, yes. I didn't realize it wasn't in my sig after the first post...

I'll make sure to do that from here on, thanks.
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Continued literary whoredom:

Chapter 5 is now posted! I already have Chapter 6 and part of Chapter 7 written, as well. I'm going to try for a Tuesday/Friday updating schedule, but not officially yet.

Chapter 5

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