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Old 09-28-2010, 07:59 PM   #32
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I'm ready to meet the future! Of this story!!

Great read, again. You've had some interesting developments so far, I'm looking forward to reading what happens next... should be an interesting chapter.

As for the pace of the story, I figured a lot was left out so that it could be referred to later and revealed that way. Also, I got the idea that the implants were what you described above.

One way to mitigate "I hafta have BIG" and including the extra info (if you wanted to and if it makes sense to) is to simply have longer chapters.
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